First cinematic map

My first cinematic map, I did it like 2-3 weaks ago....not really much but I hope ull like it :P

download it here

Enjoy :ggani: :ggani:

To be completely honest, I don't like it that much:
# It has many spelling errors
# In the first part when the camera is floating over the human base, set the FarZ to something much higher cause I was constantly thinking that there was a fade-out effeect.
# The time before the battle is way to long
# As is the battle itself!
# The placement of the human troops isnt well done; they're mostly in the middle of the base, while they should defend the buildings at the edge of the base. Place them more outside the base to make it realistic looking!
# In the part where the orc troops are going to report to Nieldran (I know I wrote that wrong8)) you can see the angel thing even before the orcs begin to move... Place the angel further away from the troops or adjust the FarZ so you dont see the angel until the orcs do!

Fix these things and I think you have a nice cinematic!

-- Nuladion --

Thank for the sugestion!

Well, im not gona work on it anymore but ill remember that in other cinematics...if im gona make others :P

No problem :ggani:
We're here to help eachother, aren't we

-- Nuladion --

In big battles like this, I personally believe it's better to have close ups, like In COTN Part 3 Scene 2 with the ghouls. You're feeling more in the action, try this in your next cinematics.

I don't get the ending, the angel was standing in the way... and then the orc said get out of the way...then it was over... I think the battle was too long since after a while it got kind of boring. OK storyline though!:D