| 04-20-2003, 07:59 PM | #1 |
Guest | I will keep you posted on my new cinematics THE MASTER Hey, this is the updated version of my cinematic tell me what you think i added 2 new parts.. well enjoy the movie... cuz if ya' guys think it's fine then i am gonna start working on part 2... so please tell me what is bad and if u could plz give it a rating 1-10 10 being best 1 being worst i was just wondering, ok that is it, thanks! ~*Mr.Jig*~ |
| 04-20-2003, 08:50 PM | #2 |
Guest | THE MOST RECENT "THE MASTER" ... Has been updated - 4/22/03 at 6;30 pm Eastern time i havent tested yet i just added sum doodads, there might b sum gliches tell me... enjoy |
| 04-21-2003, 12:07 AM | #3 |
Keep working, this map has some problems, but the story line is good. :D |
| 04-21-2003, 02:06 AM | #4 |
What can i say? Its much MUCH better then your first one..lol -theres actually a plot(yay) -camera angles are better(just do some minor changes to make the units you want in the picture more) -ehh... make the units actually face the person he/she is talking to...the is an actual trigger that allows you to do that..lol. One w/ the whole body, and another of just the head.... -ehh.. in the scene w/ the council members.. it seems kinda weird... they are in an open plain.. just kinda talking w/ lightning coming out of braziers... make it seem more castle like or somehting.. give it a throne or two... along w/ columns... -SPELL CHECK!!!!!! just a few.. but fix it anyways -you used some special effects.. some were decent.. others didnt work as good... |
| 04-21-2003, 09:30 AM | #5 |
Guest | k thanks, there was a throne but i'll work on it.. anyone wanna spell check for me/ lol j/k i'll do it! |
| 04-21-2003, 01:26 PM | #6 |
Why do I have the impression COTN gave you a lot of inspiration? ;) |
| 04-21-2003, 02:38 PM | #7 |
i know man.. when you were zooming through the trees.. i thought of CoTN!!!lol but you did good anyways.. nice use of fade filters:D |
| 04-21-2003, 07:07 PM | #8 | |
Guest | Quote:
DK, y do u say that i think CoTN gave me a lot of impression? But u did a great job on it and if my cinematic is compared to urs that would be awsome, but i dont wanna sound liek i am sucking up cuz i am not... But also, thanks FatUglyNakedGuy :) |
| 04-21-2003, 07:19 PM | #9 |
Guest | Do u guys think it is fine the way it it? Should i start part 2? If u have sudgestions plz tell me k thanks! |
| 04-21-2003, 08:09 PM | #10 |
It's a good cin! Here are my comments: What I like: - The fade filter in the beginning, when you zoom over the trees, is very nice and gives a good feeling to the cin! - It's a very good start for a story! - I like the part in the beginning, when the Bird flies above the trees! What you should work on: - The camera in the beginning isn't really following the Bird! The bird goes out of sight some times. - Lightning comes out of nowhere for no reason? - The High Council is standing in the open? Make it more like they're standing in a room! - The waterfalls seem to be 'flying' above the terrain! Lower them a bit with CTRL+PageDown! - Make some variation in the trees! It's all green now! Add some Fall Trees or something! Also, add some more height to the terrain! - There are many typos! Please fix them! A good cinematic can be spoiled completely due to bad grammar and typos! If you have problems with it I (or osmeone else) can help you! Overall, very good! I give it a 7 out of 10! Keep up the good work :D ~ Nuladion |
| 04-21-2003, 08:14 PM | #11 |
Guest | Thanks, one thing... the bird is doing that on purpose, i will raise the hight in the forest, everyone tells me that my grammer and spelling sucks so can sumone plz just fix it for me? And were is there lighning? I'll work on it! Thanks ! |
| 04-21-2003, 08:17 PM | #12 | |
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the lightning is right above/behind the guards! Also, lightning coming out of braziers is kinda weird! Or try and make the lightning have the color of fire (or just use a fire doodad!). I'll check your spelling tomorrow, cause it's 0.10 AM now and I'm going to get some sleep 8) |
| 04-21-2003, 08:37 PM | #13 |
Guest | ok... thanks and good nighT! lol |
| 04-21-2003, 08:41 PM | #14 | |
Guest | Quote:
Oh lol, sry i read that wrong, but it sure did,made me change my genre of cinematics... i was going for sumthing that gives the feel of a sum what thing like COTN later but does it look like i copied from COTn cuz i dont wanna and i'll put it in the credits of sumthing... |
| 04-22-2003, 03:10 AM | #15 | ||
Did you read my other post about about your cin? Quote:
Also the lightning bolds seen to yell noobie, also you need to do something the first time they menechen the child like play a few beats of doom.mp3 and do a feet up pan like I did in my matrix arena, Quote:
please make this look like a room or something and dont over use any doodad, you overused the lightning, as I have said, and the trees, more varence Rating: (I am very critical) 7.5/10 Camra movement 8/10 Plot (if it thickens I will change this) 6.5/10 SFX (you overused the lightning and is better then most as new as you) 6/10 Doodad and terraning (make your planes look like they aren't some garden, give them rocks and grass and lots and lots of stuff and change the terran textures alot My Doodads to the Limit ) Total 70% (28/40) Start the next one, but every time you think of something to fix in your first go fix it, if you repost I will rerate :ggani: |