Story

There was a stormy day in Martish land. Arkidas the peasant was on his travel to Moontear village. He had to move army supplies to Moontear village since attack of the wildmen was expected in the morning. Arkidas's family lives in Moontear village, Arkidas was afraid of if the wildmen would kill them or kidnap them. On the travel Arkidas sees a man by the road fighting 4 wildmen. The man calls on help, immediately Arkidas grabs a sword and helps the man. At the end they beat the wildmen. The man greatly appreciates the help. He tells Arkidas that his name is Kelgor and he is a necromancer. Kelgor tells Arkidas that its very important for him to get to Moontear village. He told him that the ancient evils, the Delfur'Z sent army to assist the wildmen since they couldn't destroy the village on their own. “Wildmen are poor servants of the Delfur'Z,, said Kelgor. “I feel dark power not so far away, the Delfur'Z must not be far away, we better keep going to Moontear. The next morning they arrive to Moontear, but it seems to be too late. The land is corrupted and green smoke spawns from the ground and the buildings have burnt to ashes. “Kelgor, what do you know about the Delfur'Z?,, “They are undead creatures which server their mighty king. A few months ago I heard about they were about to attack Martish land, but I didn't believe it until yesterday when I got a sign which. You can see that sign was right now.,, Kelgor told Arkidas that his family could still be alive, they are probably being moved to Delfur'Z land and will become slaves forever if no one would help them. Arkidas asked Kelgor how possibly he could do anything to help them. Kelgor said there was only one way, he couldn't do anything as a peasant but he could become a Hunter Of Chaos. Hunters Of Chaos are a order which was created hundreds of years ago. The first HoC wasn't so different from Arkidas, his family was killed, but he swore to avenge them. Then he created the HoC order and it has exist since then. “If you accept to join the Hunters Of Chaos you must swear to not use your powers for evil. I am a old HoC but I retired so there is a space left for you, and since I owe you a life I offer you this. Hunters Of Chaos are dark but no like the Delfur'Z,,(Said Kelgor) Arkidas accepted his offer. Kelgor told Arkidas to meet him the next morning by the well in Avane village.

A few notes:.
*Arkidas's family is not dead.
*Arkidas will train in Martish land to become a HoC.
*The story is has allot of drama for drama lovers like me.

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*Rewritten! Again for 3rd time! 09/12/04 GMT+0* Read again please!

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What you cant be bothered to copy and paste it here?! Eeesh kids today, lazy as anything. Also why you posting about the story again when you already posted it there and got responses there?!

As for the story, you could of presented it better to make it readable, i got board after a few sentances, as it had bad bladeeblablabla :P. Although i had to re read it 2/3 times over to get it, its a fairly average to good warcraft storyline, i must admit you have already created a bridge between the main character and the user! good job on that, otherwise 5.6/10 :\

Well I could maybe write more there but I don't want to be a spoiler :o I guess I will change the story a little, though this part of teh story is only a cinematic you will begin playing after this.

sound ok, although it may seem a little left centered... no offense of course.

Rewrote story, 3rd update today. Please rate it again!

Writing was choppy, could of used more action at the attack part instead of saying they were attacked and killed them. Describing things more will draw in the reader better for it will make the picture in the readers head. Sounds interesting though for trainign to become this HoC and killing the big bad guy.