Dark Magician Girl (head pose)

here's something ive done recently,

she an improvement i think,





crits comment and suggestions are all open, and ill post back the changes too so dont forget to check back now and then.

Edit- Edited pic 11.49pm - Thu 16 Dec

weird shoulders, reaally small body and no boobs, if i remember correctly they were pretty big:p

ignoring the body, the head is pretty good, now you need to master the nose, its a key part.. from that pose it should look like this or something near that on the other side

oh and get good paper >_< lined paper isnt nice

hrm... here i go again..

1. DID U SMUDGE!?... IM ABOUT TO SMACK YOU IF YOU DID!!!! smudging is like the cheapest way of blending, as well as making ur work look like very dirty.
2. be more confident with ur lines... i can barely see the nose
3. value changes my son.. value...... im pretty sure that the clothes are not lighter then the skin tone, and the shading on the face is pretty much just one color.
4. i dont really know what im look at for the body.... ur lines are too light and its hard for me to tell what im looking at.(same thing goes for the hat)
5. eyes seem a bit asymetrical....

ur face is better.. and i guess u improved.. can really tell since u didnt really draw the whole body to compare with ur other drawings..

Here's the ref pic,

well its look accurate to the concept but in greyscale you cant see that shading on her nose, that is why its represented with a second line or you could higlight the nose, just erase the part that should be lighten (since you smudged), the nose you made is like a profile nose

oh and yes you got to do soething about those lines, that is a good reason to get a 3h pencil, start doing pale line than just redo the complete line with a darker pencil and in 1 trait instead of 50 littles one, it will look better, i had that problem and it is a good thing to exercise yourself with reference

before i was drawing too dark now too light lol

ok ill work on that, and ill work on my bright white paper i got today .

any mroe crits comms and suggestions,

btw thanks for the feedback so far, Rep for all !