Valourian Knights

A few blood drops hit the ground,being followed by a stream.As I see the vacant expresion on my enemy's face I knew I had won the battle.As his corpse tumbles down the hill, a sudden laughter is heard from behind me."You're reputation is well earned Mitherial" It is a man dressed in a black cloak, a hood is covering most of his face.All that I could see was his clear blue eye's.Then he speaks"I have come to take you"."Take me where?"."Back to the place you belong,back to Valoura"."And what if I refuse to go back"I reply with anxiety."Then I'll have to take you by force"

With my sword still unseathed I rush towards this cloaked figure.
Then I feel a slight sting in my right arm."A dart"
Suddenly I feel my stregth leaving me.The man starts to laugh again.
"Don't worry it's not posion, but you will fall asleep any second now"
Did he paralize me?
With my last bit of stregth I swing my sword at him.But he's faster then he looks.
He dodged my attack.Then everything fades into darkness.

Then I wake finding myself in my old room in Castle Valoura.All of my stuff were still here.
As I look around I see the door is open.Then I hear voices
"He still has'nt woken, thats strange the paralizers must have worn off already"
Then the other voice reply's
"Let him rest.He has been through alot these last few months"
Then the voices fade away as the footsteps gets softer.
Then I sigh looking outside trough my window.
The city looks lively.Each street filled with people.I could even see afew ships from here.Then I remember the horrors within the city.It might have been one of the reasons I left Valoura in the first place.

to be continues???

Okay people this is a first time I've written a Story.So please give some feedback

my suggestion is to try separating the dialogues of the characters, it makes it easyer to read. Story may turn out quite good, so continue with it, you should get better the more you write.
(I cant guarentee the quality of my suggestions, i havent been writing stories very long )

Its been such a looong time since i heard a story that is'nt simple here. Your story might be written simply, but it looks like at least its going somewhere. I mean you just wrote alot about the charecter in a few short lines, he's a warrior, he's known, he has history that ties to Valoura, and gave hints that theres something that lies under the city false look.
Seperating dialoge would probably be better when writting here on forums.

Keep going, improving with time is always guarenteed. My advice, details such as names of characters, places, or whatever value very little. Focus on History, Character(not characters, Character/Feeling/Depth), and the sequence of your events(how your story unfolds).

Looking forward to more