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Priests...

04-01-2005, 01:00 AM#1
BleedsNoMore
A war rages on between heaven and hell, a war that doesnt take place on earth, but effects the lives of humans nonetheless. If hell begins to win, earth will be invaded...hell has begun to win...demons flood through portals, minds are possesed, and the entire future of earth rests on the shoulders of two men...two priests, a Satanic priest...and a Catholic priest, both are young and know what they have to do...they have been placed there, by God and Lucifer...the fate of earth depends on which of those two wins...the only thing is...not even they know that...ladies and gentlemen...sit back, relax, and watch as the battle for mankind unfolds right before your very eyes...
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Lucas DeVollo, ayoung catholic priest sits alone in a cathedral, the candles burn brightly, and he kneels before a pedestal, on this pedestal, one of the oldest known bibles, he preys..."My lord, I sense a great evil, but not just in this city, in the world...I wish to help, to fight the evil...please...help me..." Just as Lucas finishes praying, he falls to the ground unconscious, he could see God's shadow, "Lucas my son, this is your purpose, go forth, and defeat the evil that takes this world, you will find a young man much like yourself attempting to rid the world of good, when you find him...destroy him...that is your purpose..."with that God's shadow faded away and Lucas fell back into consciousness, back into the real world. He stood up, and knew exactly that to do, he went to a storage vault under the church, before this, he never knew it existed. In that room he found the most beautiful bible he had ever seen, with that he found two pistols plated with gold, silver, and copper. On the guns were heavenly designs. He also found a sword, it too had heavenly designs, the last thing he found were black robes, he also found a black leather belt, it had holsters for his guns and a sheath for his sword. The last thing he found was a silver crucifex and some bullets. He put the bullets in pockets on the robe. "What am I missing? Ah yes..." he climbed the stairs up to the ground level of the cjurch and found his car outside, inside were his sunglasses, he put them on and closed his eyes....

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Vincent Izuel sat in a circle of candles, he had been praying to his lord...Satan himself, he had seen a black crown, with huge spikes protruding from the top, over the mouth opening was hanging black strings of beeds. "Vincent, angels and spirits from heaven have crept into the world, they must be destroyed, if they are not...we will fail, and we shall never retake what is rightfully ours...you will meet a young catholic priest...kill him...he will only interfere with our plans..." Vincent was thrown out of medidtation. He got up and grabbed his weapons, a long staff with a blade on the end, it was black iron and had devilish images decorating the blade. He then picked up his psitols, they were silver and black and were covered in evil designs. He also grabbed his knife he used for sacrifices. He put on a black trench coat and his hat, it was wide brimmed and it shadowed his face. He folded the staff,as it was made to be hidden, put his guns in his holsters inside his coat, put the knife in his pocket, and was off...

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When Lucas opened his eyes, some time had obviously passed, he heard a voice in his head "No Lucas, time has not passed, but you are now seeing the world as it is in the spirit world, this si twhere the demons will first take over, stop the invasion here, and you will prevent them from coming to the real earth." He looked around, the streets were cracked and it looked like a 16th century european city, all the buildings were made of stone and the streets were cobbled. Lucas walked forward and he realized, "I have no idea where to go..." the voice on his head was back "Anywhere Lucas, the demons are everywhere..." it once again faded. He walked forward and saw a group of people making a ring around two people. Upon coming closer he realized all the people were armed and only one of the men in the circle was human. The people were yelling "Kill it! Take it down! Spawnof Satan!" Lucas quicly realized why, it wasn't hard to figure out, one of the fighters was a demon, it had wings and it was long and gangly, but unusually strong. Its long white hair shrouded its head and its eyes were completely pitch black. It linged at the man, he dodged but the demon was one step ahead of him, it slashed to the side with its claws and ripped the mans stomach open, he guts flopped out on the pavement and the man fell to the ground, another man stepped forward and the demon was on him. It clung to his head and chewed off the mans skin and muscle, this man too fell to the ground...faceless. Lucas asked a woman standing near him "What is that thing? A demon for sure, but of what sort?" The woman looked at Lucas, its a very powerful demon we believe it has come to take our village so the weaker demons can inhabit it. Lucas nodded. He took a step forward and the crowd parted. He walked into the circle, the demon lunged for him, he had pulled out his pistols, he pistol whipped the incoming creature and it fell to the ground, with a snarl it was back up, it ran for Lucas and he shot it in the wing several times, the creature screamed and jumped up in the air, its hands stretched out to cling to Lucas' face, he shot both of its arms off and took a step to the side. It landed off balance and Lucas fired several shots into it's back, the creature fell to the ground, dead. "Cut off it's head! We want to display it as a reminder to all demons to stay away from our village!" a man cried. Lucas put his guns away, he pulled out his sword, and chopped the demons head clean off. Picking up the head he handed it to the man. "Here, now tell me, are there any more demons in this village?" A woman looked at him, "No, this is the only one, that we know of anyway...and we thank you! You have removed this demonic threat and killed a creature few could kill alone." Landon noticed the demon's head had changed, it had turn to the head of an old woman, but her eyes were still pitch black and she had pointed teeth. The woman noticed Landon examining the head, "The demon, disguised itself with an old woman, she had died, and before anyone had found the body, it had been infested." "How do you know all this?" Lucas asked. "it isnt the first time it's happened, that's what these demons do. We needn't even ask what happened anymore..." Lucas looked to the east, he noticed the village didnt continue and it turned into fields. He turned his back to the people and began walking, he knew there were other villages like this out there, and he wanted to help them too, besides...this would only help in his quest...

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Ok this is only a little bit of the story, itll continue, but tell me how you like this before I continure writing it.
04-01-2005, 06:14 PM#2
nihilisticdream
Nice story. (you used nonetheless *giggels*)

But maby your story is a bit TOO straight forward. Talk a little more of how the person feels, or where he is at. just "the village" isnt enough.
Fladien do's this pretty well (read his "if and only if.." story.

its pretty good for the rest. I wanna read more.
04-01-2005, 11:27 PM#3
BleedsNoMore
yea actually I know what you mean, I dont like this story nearly as much as my others, when I was writing it I really shouldn't have been cause I needed to do something so I was kind of rushing thorugh it, the rest should be better though
04-02-2005, 07:07 PM#4
BleedsNoMore
This is the second part of the Priests saga, I hope you enjoy and please give me feedback. Thx
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Vincent Izuel walked down the cobbled city street, unlike Lucas he had been better informed of what would happen and knew what this place was. As he walked he came upon a cathedral, a heavenly glow enshrouded it, Vincent smiled noticing a statue of an Angel. , Vincent pulled out his gun and blew a hole through the Angel's head. He looked at the church again, his smile faded. He walked into the church, it was empty, and it was far too quiet. But he could tell he wasn't alone, he slowly pulled out his pistols and walked forward, looking about him at all times, never letting his guard down. "Hm, I sense the strength, for my first kill, this is gonna be pretty challenging." he thought. Just then something moved in the rafters, he looked at the spot where the disturbance had been. All of the sudden, Vincent felt warm, but he hated it, he spun around his trench coat in a whirlwind and fired four shots at the angel. It pulled forth a sword and challenged Vincent to attack again, silver blood was trickling from the holes Vincent had put in it's wings. Vincent jumped behind a pillar and reloaded his guns, then he jumped behind another, leaning around the pillar he took 6 shots at the angel, he had obviously tricked it because, two hit it in the arm, another in the wing and the other three missed. It turned towards Vincent, it raised it's arms, sword in hand and swung at the spot where Vincent had been. He had jumped to the side and was now running the length of the church, he turned and unloaded his clips into the angel. Despite all the bullet holes it moved towards him, he quickly reloaded his guns and jumped behind another pillar. Vincent jumped out and once again unloaded both his clips into the angel, this time it fell to the ground. He pulled out his staff and unfolded it, as the angel slowly started to get up he whipped out his knife and stuck it through the angel's wing, into the floor. Pinning it to the ground. He then sliced open the angel's back, and fired one shot into the angel's head. Vincent heard a voice in his head "Good Vincent, with every angel you kill you add one more fallen angel to our force, for if an angel is killed at the hands of a child of Satan, it becomes a fallen angel..." the voice faded, and Vincent, satisfied with his work, walked out of the church, once he left the horrific transformation of the angel began. It's lips turned black and it's eyes became bloodshot, it's wings too became black and the bullet holes remained, the skin turned pale and horns protruded from it's skull. Another member, was added to Satan's army...