A goblin in trouble

A Goblin in... eeh... trouble!


Once a upon a time (actaully it happened yesterday, but don't tell anyone) in the orc sub-nation of goblins named Furotar, with the capitol city of Dorgrimmar. Here the ruler was Gayloy Gazlowson this little funny dude, was quite good to rule and empire (when you think of it is a goblin, oh my god). A day, Gibim and his friends went to the mines of Orgrimmar, to do a random work, just to have something to do, for such small funny dudes as goblins, the life in a desert can be quite boring. As they entered the mine Cray Crazyguy (or just "The Crazy Annoying Goblin") came running and yelled "The kobolds are coming! Everyone get outta 'ere!"
"Huh?" the little group of goblins said at same time. Not bothering about Cray, the little group of funny dudes moved father into the mine. They came to one of the newly made tunnels.
"Hi there guys! Wow! Great job! You are coming far!" Gibim said.
"Yup! We'll give ore supplies to the 'hooole world with these tunnels!" the leading architect said.
"Uhmm. What happened to Cray some seconds ago?" Gibim asked
"Don't really know, he was send in to explore the tunnel, when he came screaming and running out!" the architect said.
Now there was total silence.
Then Gibim said...
"Uhmm, architect, what about that kobold behind you?"
"Well, i guess we dug into a kobold ci...ty... uhmm damned..."

There were around six seconds with total silence again.

Then the architect (and all of the workers) ran screaming to the entrance/exit of the mine.

Gibim and he's friends looked after them.

Then they looked at the kobolds again. After two seconds the rest of the goblins
- except Gibim - ran the same way as the other workers. When Gibim realized he was all alone with five kobolds standing in front of him, he froze of fear.

Then everything blacked out...

To be continued...

I allways liked goblins, sooo... tune in next time on...! GC! (Goblion Channel)

Cool story, but here is some things to check. First.


This is a incomplete sentance. Instead of using the period, you should have put a comma and made the sentance longer.


I think you mean, an empire. Post again, if I am wrong though.


Make sure to capatlize your I's.


Instead of using the dash, you could of used a comma.

Good short story. Hope I helped.
~Azhag~

Well I am not a grammar whore so dont worry.

I see no problems with the story, the only problem was I was about to scroll down to finish it but there was "To be continued..." I wait in anticipation for the next instalment.

Actually im opening up my WordPad right now and are making next part now!!



Part 2!!


When Gibim awoke, he noticed he was being beared (that word i couldn't!) on a stretcher, a stretcher made of.. cow-hide.

Torches were lighting up the tunnel they were going through, he also noticed it was the kobold who beared him (again!).

Finally, they came to a very very big hole in the underground. It was a big kobold city, actually it looked much like Dorgrimmar, his home-city.

They came to the gate of the big city. The kobolds layed the stretcher, and they succeded in making Gibim understand, that he should go off the stretcher.

"Grunf granf gruns?" the kobold atop the wall said. Gibim couldn't understand a word.
"Frums gruns!" the kobold that seemed to be the leader of their small party said.

Two of the kobolds took Gibim's arms and forced him to walk.

As they came to the center of the city, Gibim noticed that he attracted much of the civil kobolds attention. They came to the mighty gates/doors of the koboldian palace, the doors opened...

Home in Dorgrimmar

The goblins just reported to Gayloy Gazlowson that Gibim was missing in the tunnels.
"Whoa! We seem to got a reeaally biig problem here! How are we supposed to get him out of the nasty kobolds claws, boss?" one of the goblins asked.
"Geezes, i really really don' know! I thin' we gonna ask Tr.. thr.. waht was he's name...? Thrall that's it! We're gonna ask our leader thrall!" Gayloy said.

Later...

"So, our fellow goblin-lord want me to help him get one of he's goblins back? Say that i will surely help, i allready got a plan. Give him ths letter!" Thrall said to the little messenger-goblin that came to ask him he's asistance.

To be continued...

Word isn't always picking the mistakes out of it. Though they pick mistakes out of it, they ignore sentence construction, something I'm not all that great in either.

I use Word for spelling mistakes only. Thats all you should use it for as well. You could write a line like this:
hello telephone microphone sound... etc.
A sentance thats makes no sense and yet it still think it is a correct sentance. Trust me use Word for spelling mistakes only.

*giggels* UFO!! I LOVE YOUR GOBLIN WRITING STYLE.

thats all i have to say. (as azhag stated, checkt it first in words. If your not english then you can set the language to english at the top bar.)