A night of a teenager.

NOTE: This does contain FOUL language and this should not be read by someone that hasnt watched south park. This is a somewhat mature story.

A night of a teenager

"What do you mean I cant go to Toms?" I yelled at my parents. "Because!" My stupid mother yelled back. Its the same thing every night, I finish my work then ask if I can go out. "What the fuck kind of answer is that?", "Dont you swear at your mother!" My dad responded. "Then stop being cunts!" Right after saying that I regreted it, Stupid, stupid. "What the fuck did you just say?" My mom doesnt like the word "cunt" she thinks it offends women. "I said CUNT!" Of course I know I am just getting deeper and deeper in shit but if I back down now then I may never recover. Then quickly thinking I said "And dont say fuck!" it was pretty bad but I think I got them. Then angerly my mom said "FINE! Do what ever you want! I dont care anymore! Go smoke weed, drink or shoot people for all I care!" Now she was getting out of hand. "I dont fucking do drugs you dumb ass!" She knew this but she always uses that stupid guilt trip. "What about drinking?" She got me there. By now my dads left the house to go for a drive but now it was just me and her which was better than the two of them. "I DONT DRINK!" I lied, but she bought it. Great now we have covered two out of the three things she doesnt care about. "What about gangs? How do I know you dont sell the drugs or alchohal?" Now she was getting really stupid. "Dont be a fucking idiot!" by now I am leaving the room going out the door. I heard her yell something back but she was muffled by the door.

I was halfway to Toms when I saw Rachel and her "posse" walking down the street. I blushed. I have no problem with talking to girls but when that group is together they can make you do some stupid shit. "Hey Ryan!" Rachel yelled, now walking faster I yelled "Hey rach!" Jesus Christ I hope they dont follow me. Last time the girls came over to Toms with me it ended up with his mom walking in on us all naked in his hot tub and pool...that did not go over well with his parents, my parents just made sure I was having safe sex (but I wasnt even having sex) and that were all ok. My parents are cool like that. But right now I needed to make sure I got to Toms alone. By now Rachel has run up but the rest of the girls stayed behind, which can only mean one thing. A rumour about me or someone I know has started. "So why did you do it?" great something about me. "Do what?" I said. "Dont act dumb with me!" Great she thinks I know "I seriously dont know what the fuck your talking about." She sighed then went on "FINE! Im just going to pretend you forgot. I am about to remind you...." She then whispered into my ear the most horrifying sentence I ever heard. "Why did you fuck Mel?" Oh my fucking god. I then exploded. "WHAT THE FUCK? I NEVER FUCKED MEL! I NEVER EVEN KISSED MEL! I HAVE NO THOUGHTS OF FUCKING MEL! IM STILL A FUCKING VIRGIN FOR FUCKS SAKES!" Crap now the whole world knows Im still a virgin when the whole school thinks Im a sex god. Dont get me wrong being a "sex god" is great but having people know Im not can not only make more rumours but ruin my life. I quickly looked to the girls. They didnt hear me, Thank god. "Dont lie like that. I beleive you that you didnt fuck her. Mel isnt that type of girl, but we all know that your not a virgin." Well that was a scary moment in my life. And now its over. "But....." shit she has something else. "You know I really want to go to Toms with you....", "Fuck no remember what happened last time?" She remembers. "I do! But I can ditch the others!" Now this didnt really matter, what damage could a single girl do? "OK fine but do it quick I am freazing my nads off here." Although it was the middle of summer it was a saying we made up for getting impatient. "OK hold on." She ran to her friends said something. Then came back to me. No giggles, odd. "OK lets go!"

"So...while were on the topic of sex, how many girls have you hooked up with?" Great that question. "The number dont count." Oohh I liked that answer, I felt pretty proud of thinking of that. "OK....I heard its 32...is that true?", Shit a exact number. "I aint sayin shit OK?", "OK OK calm down." I looked over to her and to my horror to see her biting her bottom lip and looking me up and down. Every guy knows that if Rachel Binato does that to you it could be really bad....or really good depending on your outlook on things. "So....do you know if Toms parents are home?" Crap thats bad, especially if they are. "I dont know" I replied. "I think they might be." More like I WISH they might be! "Why?" Now she would have to come clean. "No reason....", "Bullshit Rach your such a bad liar!" Now we were getting into a more joking friendly mood, I figured if I can kill the sexual tension we wont run into this problem again. "I know I know." She stopped biting her lip and looking at me, thank god. We came around the corner to Toms house. It was fairly big for a corner house and as kick ass back yard. Enough to throw a foot ball and a pool with a hot tub. I knocked on the door. Rachel hid behind a bush she gave me a "shhh dont tell him" looks. Tom opened the door and said "Hey sup?" Right before I could warn him Ms. Ninja attack jumped infront of him and I swear he screamed like a girl. We both laughed for a few minutes then headed inside.

"So Tom....are your parents home?", "Nah Rach they out for the weekend." SHIT! Im afraid to look at her. Either shes gonna get me or him. I looked. Crap its both. "Im gonna go to the washroom." She knew that both of us knew. "What the fuck are we gonna do?" Tom said. "How the fuck do I know?" I was nervous. "OK heres what we do. One of us will say we have a headache.", "Then?" I needed to know his plan. Tom is good at thinking things out. "Then one of us takes the bullet. We both cant have a head ache she'll know somethings up." So we were in a agreement. But we couldnt decide so we went to the most even and scientific method, rock, paper, scissors two out of three. After doing about 10 games including ties it ended up with me needing to take the bullet. Shit. Tom was releived. "OK guys what do you want to do?" Rachel was done taking what I can only think the longest washroom break ever. "Well Tom has a headache." That was a good lie and she beleived it. "Actually what I think Im gonna go take a nap in my room you guys can watch TV" Tom was setting me up. And he liked it. I guess this is in revenge for super glewing his hand to a girls ass. "OK ya. If we get to loud just come down and tell us." Rachel said. Crap shes a slut. "Ya. Maybe youll feel better after a nap." I hope he does. So there we are. On the couch, alone, watching a rerun of Cheers. Then suddenly without any warning she starts to take off her bra. Shit what the fuck am I going to do? I looked up at the ceiling and just wished something would happen. Then suddenly my wishes were answered in the form of a small silver box. "Oops thats me cell!" Rachels cell phone is ringing and if my luck works out she will have to leave. "Ya.....what!?......ok.....im on my way." YES! Holy shit my life is saved. "M-My grandmother is in the hostpital....." God dammit I wanted a reason for her to leave not a bad reason! "You ok?" I had to ask. "Ya...its been a month like this. It was gonna happen sometime I guess." Ok good shes accepting it. "Ya its for the best I assume." She nodded in aggreement. She then left with her mom. Tom comes running down stairs yelling "YES FUCKING YES IT FUCKING WORKED!", "What what worked?" I really hoped this was good news. "What was the reason she left?" He asked excitedly. "Dude her grandmo-" he didnt let me finish. "THAT WAS ME! I PHONED HER MOM PRETENDING TO BE HER AND ASKED TO GO HOME! THEN I PHONED HER IN A HIGH VOICE PRETENDING TO BE HER MOM!" Tom was a fucking genious. "You fucker. You dirty little smart fucker." We were both smiling. "I think this will be the only time I will ever say that this is the only time Im glad someone didnt get layed." I agreed with Tom.

I decided to phone my parents and ask if I could stay at Toms for the night, and I appologised. My parents forgave me before I hung up. I think the space will help us get a little bit more cooled off. But at the moment all I needed was some sleep.

(P.S this was based on different events in my life and different events in other peoples lives that i know of)

any thoughts on my quick story?

Interesting. Funny about the things that happen in our lives, or not so funny. Okay lets get to the grammar. :P


When another person is talking, begin a new paragraph. So for this entire paragraph, it should look something like this.
"What do you mean I cant go to Toms?" I yelled at my parents.
"Because" My stupid mother yelled back. Its (Here it should be It's, because It's is singular for it is.) the same thing every night (everynight is one word), I finish my work then ask if I can go out.
"What the fuck kind of answer is that?"

That basiaclly sums it up.



Again there is no need for all the letters to be capatilized. The ! says it all.



Only three periods is necissary.



When writing stories, try to use the word for numbers. So ten.

Your grammar has improved a lot, good job. A few mistakes, but even I make mistakes. Like I said above, interesting story. Good job.
~Azhag~

Thanks! Actually I really needed that first pointer. I like writing stories like that but I wasnt sure how to put it. And yes life is a odd continuing machine isn't it?

Thats what the grammar whore is for. :P

Thank you, Grammar Whore, for your undying service to poor-grammar folk like us!


Btw nice work. I do belive you should switch some parts around, a little choppy in areas.

isnt life just a big choppy... um... horse?

This is a very angry kid. :o

wow i forgot about this story it got drowned out. thanks for reminding me bout it hobo!

Too hard to read... @_@

If there was more paragraphs, then it'd be easier to read.

No need to do forum necromancy hobo, especially for crappy stories. I won't rate it, because this was not written in any litterary perspective.