False... A short poem

04-05-2005, 07:56 AM

False...

Destroy what's sick,
Destroy what's wrong,
I thought I loved,
Destroy the one,
Kill the one,
who caused it all,
Kill the body,
watch it fall,
only then will i rest,
in peace and joy,
until my death,
do not lie,
covet my back,
Don't torture me,
I'll get you back,
Your end is come,
for you caused mine,
I will hate you for all of time,
Will I show it?
I don't know,
But i will hate you,
this I know,
You hurt me,
You hurt us all,
Do not lie,
Do not be,
False...

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I wrote this today because I found out my ex-girlfriend had been cheating on me when we were going out and that she got a new boyfriend before even breaking up with me.

04-05-2005, 07:58 AM	#2
BleedsNoMore	oh btw it may seem a bit harsh, but I dont actually wanna kill her. I dont kill ppl, and I dont totally hate her...but still i was pretty f***** pissed

04-05-2005, 11:41 AM	#3
ufo	Poor you :( Nice poem anyway.. Kill her...! uhmm... you'd better not ^^

04-08-2005, 07:02 PM	#4
nihilisticdream	Nice poem. its niced when you read it really fast. And a little love advise dont get attached to a girl bevore you have like 3 months. and kick that bitch on the ass. PS:(one little mistake "Your end is come," dont know for sure but its "your end is comming" or "your end has come")

04-08-2005, 07:28 PM	#5
Azhag	Good poem. I don't know why, but it is impossible for me to write poems. Make sure you capatilize all the "i's" Good job.

04-10-2005, 04:06 PM	#6
BleedsNoMore	Yea it's kinda harsh, and although I was pissed Im not THAT angry, I was basically trying to get my point across really fast lol. I didnt necessarily love her, but I figured it'd be a good topic for a poem.

04-10-2005, 04:45 PM	#7
johnfn	Its good, but its lacking something, I'm not sure what. Maybe I'm just not used to that particular type of poem.

04-10-2005, 09:18 PM	#8
[niro]	Its good, i like it alot, it doesn't matter if your exagerating or not, its good.