Happy Birthday Grant!

Today is Grant's Birthday. I feel really excited, because he's a good friend of mine, and I have a very cool present for him, a big T-shirt with "Grant U Rok" written on it. Grant is 14, he's getting older every year. I laugh because I just thought such a stupid phrase...

I ring the doorbell and enter Grant's house. He says "Hey Eric! I thought you wouldn't come!". Of course I came. How could I miss such an occasion? I shaked hands with everyone and went in the kitchen to see how the cake was. It is a big white cake with glamorous sugary toppings. I laugh silently thinking what anyone, even me, could do to the cake right now, because the kitchen is empty.

I go out of the kitchen and party with everyone. Grant is very funny, he invented a game called the "Foo' game" where everyone has to sing a different song for a few seconds. Rapidly, we are out of songs and have to stop. Grant won, but we really let him win, because, after all, it was his birthday, not ours.

It is already getting late, and Grant opens his presents. He seems very happy when he sees the T-Shirt. Not his mother. I hate her anyway, she never lets Grant come home after 7P.M.. I never saw his father, but I bet he is a moron too.

Now, we eat the cake. It is very nice, but I pretend to be sick and not able to eat so Grant can have an extra slice. I feel really nice today. We continue the festivities, but everyone seems to be suddenly very excited.

Grant's mother had to go out for a very important meeting. Surely a meeting of the "Pest Mothers" association. We now are all alone at Grant's place. We start breaking things. A girl named Maria even jumped out of the window of the third story in the garden, and I think she broke her arm, but noone cares.

The party is starting to become really dangerous. Some boys and girls went down in the basement, and are doing incorrect things for their age. I am scared, and I think I have to go away. Why did I get in this place anyway?

I try to exit through the front door, but it is blocked. I am scared. I open a window, jump outside and start running home. I can see some smoke in the horizon, the house must be on fire. How will they exit with the door barricaded? I am definitely scared. I feel a chill in my whole body.

Next time I go to a friend's party, I won't put marijuana in the cake again, I swear it.

UHhhhnnnnnnnnn...

Where on earth did you get the idea...

No comment from me.

Nice weed mon, but it doesn't last long enough to work (aka story is too short). But the Idea extremly original I'll admit that

A little TOO original if you ask me...

Also since you wanted the review, I'll give you one.


Character Development: 4/10, Humor 4/5, Writing Skill 8/10, Effort 10/15, Grammar 9/10, Flow 9/10, Idea 10/15, Format 5/5 Tilt 7/10. 66/90. Thats almost rediculously high for this story... I suspect someone has HACKED my rating system! *gasp* Or maybe I'm not giving you enough credit.

Oh well, keep writing stories, although personally I prefer more serious stories over stuff like this :P although I did like the last bomb :D

true story?heh doing inapropriate things for there age you say...
anyways thats a funny part


im sure we would all do this when no one is looking,im sure...
pretty good story,still wondering,is it true...
il give you some rep.if only noobs wouldnt red rep me.youd get green,only grey for you...

Damn, BadFurDay how am I ever supposed to make a good story when you write this fantastic ones =P

I really liked this story, especially that you don't reveal why the people are acting so crazily until the end. Although you could guess that some drugs had to have gone down at one point or another.

Overall a 8.5/10 it was a little short for my liking, besides that fantastic.

Indeed, it was a little short, but it was told by a kid, so it had to be short and not worked at all, it is just some raw talking, almost no accurate descriptions, in fact, almost nothing.

Also, this story has not been lived before *looks up* or maybe by another person in this forum *looks straight at someone*