The Grove of the Ancients

Long ago, when the Kaldorei were still just beginnning to discover magic, their soon to be greatest allies had already lived for millenia. Deep within Ashenvale forest lied a magical grove, where Ancients were born and raised. This grove lay hidden for all time, until the kaldorei found it one day. The mighty trees made a sacred pact with the newly-born night elves and cenarius that day. Night elven spirits would be used by the Ancients to grow smaller, weaker, but still powerful Ancients, who would in turn fight for the night elves. Cenarius then took a magical seed and cut it in half, giving one ot queen Azhara and to Pewunta, the Ancient carved by the greatest of all the Titans, The leader of the Pantheon. He alone would plant the greatest of trees, the Ancients of the Grove, who would be protected by Cenarius' sons and daughters, the Keepers and Dryads. In half an eon he only planted 50 of these great trees, only one every thousand years. Each one sprouting from a single seed, then to a simple tree, and then to what would soon be called a treant, and then finally, before their turing to the rooted Ancients, they became Protectors of the Grove, there was only one of these such beings at any one point, who seved only to defend the Grove if needed. The Ancients never were attacked or even threatened before one day, ten thousand years before the coming of the burning legion...

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Sorry guys, but I can't write more now. This will be good though.

keep writing i like it.

A few things to look out for.


This sentance made no sense. You said it layed hidden for all of time, but then they found it? You just countered what you just said. If it was hidden for all of time, then no one found them.



I think you mean 'to'.


I found this sentance funny. One number you write it wrong, and another you write it correctly, in the same sentance. Shouldn't write fifty like '50'.


This sentance is way too long. It is a run-on sentance. Add a period in there or something.

Good story line, so far. As many people have mentioned before, split the story into more paragraphs.
~Azhag~

azhag youve gotten sloppy. your fishermans quest has sucked the will to grammar whore everything you see. this was the first post ive seen in a while :p

Azhag, if you didn't know, it's a not-really-known policy that:

Any number should be written as it is spells from numbers 0-9. Any higher should be put in it's number form.

I don't think you would like to say, Seven Million, Three hundred and eighteen thousand, nine hundred and forty one.

In this case, it's 50, or fifty. Eh, let Xiash do what he wants. It is his story, after all.
I like the plot of the story because it's based on Night Elf history... I think.

By the way Xiash, good sentence fluency, or diverse sentence lengths.

Yes Azhag, if you intend to be a GW, then at least know what you are talkign about. A run on sentance is one that includes points that do not directly relate to the sentence, such as this: The monkey climbed the tree and grabbed bannanas then he ate them. This is run on. Mine is a list.

Okay first, when I corrected his numbers mistake, I corrected it because he used a number like this '50' and then in the same sentance he used a number word like this 'thousand'. I am pointing out that he should keep it to the same style. If he is going to use the number '50' then he should of wrote 'thousand' as '1000'. Do you get what I mean now?


Xiash, a run-on sentance is also when the sentance goes on and on. Hench why they call it a RUN-ON. I was saying that the sentance has too many comma's and that you should put a period in there somewere.


The difference is that, this is a story, my thread ISN'T.
Please stop trying to make up excusses to try and make me look bad.
~Azhag~

we don't have to do anything to make you look bad.

And in case you were unaware, an even lesser-known rule is that all exponential mulitples of ten should be written in formality, as in ten ,hundred ,thosand,millenion...

And the run-on is not a run on because it is a list, it does follow the rule of limtied sentences in which all things can be written as long as they are not seratist in topic.

I got my teacher to see weither it was a run-on or not, and she said you needed to put in three periods. Also, as for the numbers thing, I don't care if you follow what I say or not. I am just pointing out some helpful tips. I am not trying to make fun of you, as you are trying to do on me. If I wanted to make fun of you I would of said that your story sucked, but I didn't, this is what I said.


Xiash, you are out to get me ever since that stupid thread about the nazi's. Grow up.

Also. I have bolded the part in the sentance that I found wasn't a list.


If you are making a list, then properly you should start it with ';' or ':'.

that is what you should have done, dont say

RUN ON!!!!!!!!

say put in a bloody semicolon, I should fix that, now I shalt write more, and also, I'm not out tog et you, I'm too lazy.

You should have said that earlier. I'm not trying to make you look bad(except for that one time when you called a whale a fish. lol.).

Oh, forget it, just continue. :)