| 08-29-2005, 03:30 PM | #1 |
Sigh. Every time I come here the forum looks deader and deader. POST, FFS! =P. Here's part of a story that I've been planning to write for ages; jotting down ideas all over little scraps of paper but never actually starting. So today I picked everything up and tried, and here's what I have so far - it's just a rough draft, and the story hasn't really been fleshed out that much yet, although I do have a vague idea of where I want to take it. Basically, it's about a jaded, repressed young man who has just gone with the flow all his life; fulfilling everything he was expected to do, doing whatever he had to do simply because he had to. Then, one day, he suddenly stops to ask himself the question "Why?", and it throws his entire world into turmoil. (And yes, I know that I used the word 'pathway' many, many times, but it's a noun, and I'm too lazy to think of substitute for now =P. Feel free to post your ideas.) [Glossary (again =P)] Tai-Tai - a local colloquialism, originating from the Cantonese dialect, usually referring to an ostentatious woman of high society who spends her immense amount of free time living it up on her rich businessman husband's income. Tai-Tais are fond of draping themselves in large amounts of jewellery; they never go anywhere without decking themselves out like christmas trees. They can also be distinguished from their extra-long, french-manicured fingernails, well-honed mahjong skills, and extensive knowledge about the best spas and high teas in town. Mahjong – a popular chinese game played with tiles. No, it's not that arcade pair-matching game. Mahjong is on par with the games played in casinos in terms of popularity, although it requires far more skill to play. One particular trend of thought is that Mahjong keeps the old from going senile because of the amount of concentration and strategising the cursed game requires. I say it'll probably end up killing them from the high blood pressure first. SMS - short for something, too lazy to check what. It's just those text messages that you send with your cell phone. Singaporeans (teenagers in particular) are OBSSESSED with text messaging. They leave their phones on ALL the time, and respond almost instantaneously to each and every message that comes through - even at 4am at night. Vigilant, eh? This pathetic preoccupation with the cellphone has led to two things - ridiculous handphone bills (and when I say ridiculous, I mean like 2000-us-dollar-a-month ridiculous) and morons actually forgetting how to use proper english (they use this weird form of abbrieviated english that's favoured on internet chat clients) and ending up using SMS-language in english essays. What else can I say? Shallow is as shallow does. National Service - compulsory 2 1/2 year army duty for all males over 18 *Singapore has only got two seasons - hot and humid, and very hot and humid. **Singapore is bordered (surrounded, more like =P) by two countries - Malaysia and Indonesia. As a result, they tend to serve as a buffer against almost everything - monsoon rains, earthquakes, etc. ***In one particularly famous example, one episode of the famous american television series The O.C. was butchered, when the censorship board cut several scenes where one girl helped another girl wear a necklace, on the grounds that it was full of LESBYUNN TENNSHUNN. Something Remotely Approaching Happiness Christopher trudged silently along the narrow, crudely constructed pathway that led to his apartment block. The path was nothing more than a few leftover concrete slabs hastily thrown together over the muddy grass to allow the rich tai-tais to walk home without getting their dainty Ferragamo shoes soiled. The management had finally succumbed to the endless barrage of complaints and gotten the contractors to use the concrete tiles leftover from retiling the carpark to form a pathway of sorts over the grass. Now, they were complaining that the pathway was bleak, ugly and depressing, and demanding that something be done so that their posh, classy condominium would not look like a “construction site�. Christopher snorted softly to himself. There was just no pleasing some people. The wind blew through his dark, curly hair, tousling it this way and that. The atmosphere had a cool, moist feel to it – a result of the recent downpour. He breathed in deeply, savouring the delightfully refreshing coolness of the air, allowing it to permeate every fibre of his being. He stopped short, his sudden halt causing one of the concrete slabs to shift and splatter mud all over his expensive new black nike trainers with a sickening squelch. He loved the feel of the wind in his face just after it rained. It was the closest he could get to cold weather in harsh, sweltering Singapore. He stepped onto the grass, walking aimlessly about and drawing several annoyed twitters from the sparrows that were foraging in the grass. With each step, his shoes became increasingly flecked with muddied water and bits of grass. He would have to remember to clean them when he got home. As a child, he'd always eagerly awaited the monsoon season. The people living in Indonesia – which had just been flooded again that morning – would probably beg to differ, but he loved the rainy season. The world always felt so fresh after a good, long drenching, as if the rain had somehow managed to cleanse it; washing away all the pain and sorrow and guilt and suffering that plagued the earth day after day after day. The rest of his family hated the cold with a passion – he'd been the only one not wearing a thousand layers of clothing when they'd visited England in June. He let out an audible sigh as he recalled their vacation in Europe. His parents, much like everyone else these days, were infatuated with speed; they were always obsessed with making the most of their time, and it wasn't any different when they were on vacation. In an attempt to take in every single sight worth seeing within the quickest time possible, their parents had shuttled them from landmark to landmark, museum to museum with a brisk, dispassionate efficiency. Not that they'd truly seen much, anyway. His sister had spent the entire holiday sending SMSes to her friends in Singapore and brooding about all the fun she was missing. His mother had spent the entire vacation yelling into her cellphone. His father had done what he always did when they were on holiday; he went everywhere with his face buried in the camcorder's viewfinder, recording every single landmark and scenic location, ensuring that they'd have a permanent record of each and every place they visited. Christopher could never understand what his father was thinking – what was the point of capturing everything on tape; ensuring that he had an interminable memory of every single beautiful vacation spot he'd been to, if he'd never actually seen them with his own eyes? update 31/8 The wind howled, startling him from his quiet rumination. It was almost dark. The cold night air gusted around him, swirling his clothes into disarray and sweeping dust particles into his eyes, making them sting and tear. Goose pimples broke out on his arms and legs, and shivers of delight ran up and down his spine as he reveled in the deliciously cool evening breeze. Somehow, the cold always made him feel more alive; it invigorated him. Perhaps he had simply come to associate Singapore's generally warm climate with everything else that he hated about it – the salient superficiality, the constant rush, the endless pressure, the neverending pursuit of society's definition of success, the bleak, black emptiness that resulted. He could never understand how everyone else managed to live with it. Maybe they can't, he mused. There had been rumours going around about the skyrocketing suicide rates among the teenage demographic, but he couldn't know for sure. The local media was notorious for suppressing any and all controversial information that the government thought might put unwanted notions into the brains of the general populace. Suicide, deaths in the National Service, dissent, racial and religious differences. Everything was just conveniently glossed over as if pretending they didn't exist could actually cause them not to. |
| 08-30-2005, 12:28 AM | #2 | ||
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Anyways, I suppose I should comment on your story, as that is the reason you posted it. I found it quite interesting giving very in-depth explanations to this world. It ends on a very interesting statement, which is slightly humorous. However close to the end you meantion SMS's, I assume they are similar to IM's (Instant Messaging) from the context, but I could be wrong. |
| 08-30-2005, 12:09 PM | #3 |
Gah, I knew I'd missed something. SMSes are like ... text messages you send from your cellphone? It's short for Short Message System or something, I'm not sure (we use acronyms so much here that we don't even know the real names - how's that for infatuation with speed and efficiency =P) It's a little difficult with nouns. I'm well aware of the existence of the thesaurus, it's just difficult when you're trying to describe something that there isn't really a word for. This "world" exists, by the way. It's a very ... happy little Orwellian state in Southeast Asia. We enjoy censoring movies to bits, shutting up political dissenters by labelling them as terrorists and throwing them in a dungeon for three decades and sending people to the gallows for no particular reason. I love it here. Did I mention how much I love it here? I love it here. Please don't shoot me, I'm not a terrorist =(. And that isn't quite the end yet - I have plans to expand the story into a nice little tour of this fun, happy, fun, happy, fun place. Too little people say way too little, so I thought it would be interesting to try. |
| 08-31-2005, 01:05 PM | #4 | |||||
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How Decadence describes it, it is exactly the same out here in the Netherlands as well. I can remember a part in the newspaper about a last year student who had his exam in front of his. His entire exam was written in SMS language (or SMS-taal, how it was written in the Dutch newspaper) and because of that, he failed in every subject. When it was later checked in the "SMS language", he nearly had a perfect score. Unfortunately, that has a year or two ago and I cannot remember in what nation this happened. Could have been in the Netherlands itself, but I don't read newspapers that much :P My mother forced me to read it, since I recently graduated back then. But I guess that explains how much of an addiction SMS can be. Quote:
Three weeks ago, it came here on the Television (again, according to advertisements), but I didn't know it was famous. I really should watch more TV. Quote:
I guess I should thank you for learning me a bit about the nation where some of my blood is from. I'm half Indonesian. I guess I'll wait until the next update. Not that I have much of a choice anyway. |
| 08-31-2005, 01:39 PM | #5 | ||||||
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Mahjong is unfortunately a very chinese game. People who don't speak chinese or any of the related languages or their dialects have a hard time appreciating it. Quote:
Singaporean SMS language would hardly be the same as its Dutch counterpart. I mean, saying that is like like quoting from a trashy romance novel in an essay about "Paradise Lost" - utterly irrelevant, and it only serves to prove the adage empty vessels make the most noise right once again. Quote:
Uh huh. Except that the students here answered an English Language exam in sms language, which is as good as answering a Literature exam with illustrations from your Biology textbook. Quote:
Yes, it's famous. And yeah, you should watch more TV. And get out more. Quote:
So why are you even posting? You know, aren't moderators supposed to be the ones stopping spam, as opposed to perpetuating it? Ah well, just a silly misconception, I guess. What does any of that have to do with anything, anyway? I guess that's how you "got the most posts", eh? Post random bullshit for random reasons all over the place randomly. "OMG MY ARM HURTS AND LIEK MY BACK HAS LIEK PAIN AND I LIEK OWN ALL OF YOU BECAUSE I LIEK, HAVE HAD THEM FOR LIEK, AGES AND LIEK" "OMG MY WRISTS HAVE SCARS AND TEHY LIEK REMIND ME OF LIEK STUF AND IM LIEK SO BOROODING AND LIEK SAD AND DEPREASSED AND LIEK STFUF" "OMG MOI MEMORIEAZ ARE LIEK IMPOOTAENT BECUZ LIEK I LOSE TEHM ALOT AND LIEK STUFF". Did I mention that the common opinion on IRC is that you're lesbian trapped in a male body? (If you really are male in the first place.) Quote:
Don't try to be caustic if you can't pull it off properly, Fladian - it just makes you look like a fat, retarded poseur dork with crusty pit stains a mile wide. Oh wait, you already are. In that case, sarcasm just doesn't suit you =). |
| 08-31-2005, 02:10 PM | #6 | |
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You'd think Sailor Moon Sex would be better suited for you :) |
| 08-31-2005, 07:15 PM | #7 | ||||||||||
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Type in: 'SMS betekenis' in google, if I recall right, it's the first result (or second). Regardless, the Singaporean and Dutch (not necessarily Dutch) would highly probably be similar in addiction. Quote:
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1. I don't watch much TV, never did, probably never will. I follow the news on the radio, and watch movies at friends, though it are mostly DVD's. Since I never follow TV-series, I don't know about The O.C. 2. Get out more? Looks who's talking. Who says I don't get out? Quote:
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| 09-01-2005, 08:25 AM | #8 | |
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You know, just because you wank to anime movies aimed at 6 year olds doesn't mean everyone does. I know it may come as a surprise to you, but it's ACTUALLY the cold, harsh truth. :P Now shh, you don't want your precious arm to start hurting again :( :( |
| 09-01-2005, 08:36 AM | #9 | |||||||||
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Sigh. Dear old Fladian, completely missing the point as usual. Quote:
Thanks for proving my point again. Quote:
Asking people to post wasn't an invitation to spam. Quote:
Do you see me crying? Sorry, it's just that I can't look at ignorance and not do anything. Quote:
Thanks =). (Wonderful comeback, btw. *crowns Fladian the COMEBACK KINGQUEEN*) Quote:
Aww, Fladian. The whole world doesn't look and act exactly the same way you do, you know. Don't be sad . And it's image, dipshit.Quote:
Oh yeah? Then why are you constantly trying to imitate it? And don't even try to deny it again. Quote:
Big piece shit? Lmfao. 1. That is so original. 2. COMEBACK KINGQUEEN! 3. It's you big piece of shit, you dumbfuck. Stick to your animewhatever and neo-nazi forums until you can get your bloody english right. Quote:
So you don't like girl on girl action? Hmmm .... Oh yeah, I forgot - lesbians don't have sex, they just have lots of fun emotional drama. Sound familiar, Fladian? =). I apologise on Dorelian's behalf - he didn't mean to trample on your delicate lesbian sensibilities . In conclusion, I shall refer to common knowledge #2: "trying to reason with Fladian is like trying to reason with a brick wall; he is impervious to logic and reason". That, and he tries to drown people with nihilistic bullshit about "the scars on my wrists remind me how futile i am " and cryptic remarks about his illnesses so they don't bother to read anything and he wins by default. |
| 09-02-2005, 10:26 AM | #10 | ||||||||||||||
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What are you trying to prove, kid? |
| 09-02-2005, 12:05 PM | #11 | |
Thanks for proving me right yet again. Now you're reverting to your usual strategy - deluging your opponents with so much self-satisfied bullshit that they don't feel like reading it, much less addressing each fallacious point individually. No, I am not "avoiding hard things" or whatever the hell you mean, I just couldn't be bothered to comb through your meaningless labyrinth of fuzzy logic. Quote:
So lesbians DO have sex! Thanks for clearing that up, Fladian |
| 09-02-2005, 12:15 PM | #12 | |||
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1. Nobody cares. 2. Your condition of your arm ? Are you trying to kill me with bad english or what ? Quote:
Don't project your habits on others, Fladian. Unlike you, I like 3d, men on women action, not women on women emotional drama. Quote:
Who, me ? I'd never, EVER, apologise to someone like you, and judging from your posts, it's YOU who needs better education. |
| 09-04-2005, 08:37 AM | #13 |
You guys really have to stop quoting eachother a million times and making a million comments on the million of other comments that have gone off of another million comments. Sarcasm. The story seems more like of a description towards one person's view. It seems that there is no talking. But then again, it seems like that's in all of your writings. The problem is that this "he" has no name. This is going to become flame wars. I think arrogance is clogging your minds... Oh yes, even though I'm not Chinese, Mahjong is fun. :) |
| 09-05-2005, 11:12 AM | #14 | ||||
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You'll notice that I didn't exactly bother to address everything Fladian said - that's his tactic, anyway. He just drowns you with so much bullshit hoping that you'll just give up and he'll win the argument by default. Quote:
Hmm? I did give him a name :/. And "all my writings"? =P. I only have two up here, and the Muthusamy one is the one with the talking and no name, and this one is the one with a name and no talking - yet. Like I said, this one is an excerpt, and a very rough draft, at that - the talking comes later on. If I wanted it to be one person's point of view, I'dve made it first person. I'm keeping it in third person to make it easier to mention the thoughts of the other characters. Are we even talking about the same thing? Quote:
1. Flame wars need like, people to flame. 3 people is hardly a flame war. 2. Arrogance? I never said anything until Fladian came and started trolling with his usual irrelevant crap. It's hardly my fault that he started it. Oh wait, I guess I'm wrong - after all, I'm not the one with a Ph. D in Psychology. Quote:
I never said you had to be chinese - I merely said that it's not as easy to appreciate if you don't understand the languages that mahjong is meant to be played in. And fladian probably has chinese blood in him, anyway. And here you are, doing exactly what we were bashing Fladian for doing. Just fall into a hole and die or something. |
| 09-05-2005, 04:04 PM | #15 |
You people. This would have been a little interesting if you could've had a GOOD argument going. But no, there has to be stupid references to lesbians and cradles and whatnot that's just plain immature. This looks like an argument between 10 year olds. Anyways. Decadance. I like it. The details are really good - which seems to be the point of the writing anyways. I can truly picture it in my head - which is rare. And I can relate to the vacation part too. PS. Ignitedstar, you seem to be the only intelligent one here. |
