| 12-21-2005, 03:39 PM | #1 |
I was born when I was dead…I had no feelings, no emotions, no conspiracies or loves or compassion…I was everything and nothing. My naked body floated in the rift…I was blind, but I saw everything. Nothing escaped my gaze, but I saw nothing through my eye lids. My arms were full grown…slim but muscular…but I could not lift them. I had the body of a strong man, but I could never move. I was everything and nothing…who am I when I can barely move? I felt pain, and I tried to cry out in protest of this strange sort of torture. My angelic wings became stiff as I mourned. But nothing came from my mouth, not even a whisper. Who am I? What am I? I am not of the ancient people… nothing, I am nothing. I cried again, another desperate cry. I was hoping that something would break through the invisible barrier this time, some sort of hope of what I was is what I am now. Nothing came out. I began to drift again in the cosmos. I drifted past the planets, the stars, the comets and asteroids, the celestial beings that stared at me from their invisible planes of existence. They just stared at me, of what I was, horrified at me. For I was once a beautiful creature. Now I am an abomination, a thing. Something that deserves no pity. I drifted again, away from the cosmos… To Be Continued… |
| 12-21-2005, 04:25 PM | #2 |
hi that was nice, can u continue it? I wanna make a cinematic |
| 12-22-2005, 05:14 AM | #3 |
Nice idea, I'd like to see more stuff like this... please continue |
| 12-22-2005, 11:35 AM | #4 |
FYI guys, this isn't a story for a War 3 mod. It's just a regular read-and-you-are-done-with-it-story. |
| 12-22-2005, 12:26 PM | #5 |
FYI I don't care if it is for AoM story, or a short poem, its good and it says to be continued... I demand more ![]() |
| 12-22-2005, 12:29 PM | #6 |
I'll give ya more when I feel like giving ya more. ![]() |
| 12-22-2005, 09:43 PM | #7 |
Me want more. |
| 01-02-2006, 10:30 AM | #8 |
While the story is well-written, it's kinda short and without more it seems... unfinished? More is what the people demands! |
| 01-02-2006, 04:50 PM | #9 |
Nice. Someone actually uses proper grammar for once . This could go places, I await the next part. |
| 01-03-2006, 02:44 PM | #10 |
I would have finished it by now, but Final Fantasy VIII is kinda stealing my time. I'll get to finish this eventually, no doubt about it. |
| 01-06-2006, 09:00 PM | #11 |
Continue. |
