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The Outcast

12-21-2005, 03:39 PM#1
Doublehex
I was born when I was dead…I had no feelings, no emotions, no conspiracies or loves or compassion…I was everything and nothing. My naked body floated in the rift…I was blind, but I saw everything. Nothing escaped my gaze, but I saw nothing through my eye lids.

My arms were full grown…slim but muscular…but I could not lift them. I had the body of a strong man, but I could never move.

I was everything and nothing…who am I when I can barely move?

I felt pain, and I tried to cry out in protest of this strange sort of torture. My angelic wings became stiff as I mourned. But nothing came from my mouth, not even a whisper. Who am I? What am I? I am not of the ancient people… nothing, I am nothing.

I cried again, another desperate cry. I was hoping that something would break through the invisible barrier this time, some sort of hope of what I was is what I am now.

Nothing came out.

I began to drift again in the cosmos. I drifted past the planets, the stars, the comets and asteroids, the celestial beings that stared at me from their invisible planes of existence. They just stared at me, of what I was, horrified at me.

For I was once a beautiful creature. Now I am an abomination, a thing. Something that deserves no pity.

I drifted again, away from the cosmos…


To Be Continued…
12-21-2005, 04:25 PM#2
MaD[Lion]
hi that was nice, can u continue it? I wanna make a cinematic
12-22-2005, 05:14 AM#3
Belphegor666
Nice idea, I'd like to see more stuff like this... please continue
12-22-2005, 11:35 AM#4
Doublehex
FYI guys, this isn't a story for a War 3 mod. It's just a regular read-and-you-are-done-with-it-story.
12-22-2005, 12:26 PM#5
Belphegor666
FYI I don't care if it is for AoM story, or a short poem, its good and it says to be continued... I demand more
12-22-2005, 12:29 PM#6
Doublehex
I'll give ya more when I feel like giving ya more.
12-22-2005, 09:43 PM#7
KingGigli
Me want more.
01-02-2006, 10:30 AM#8
FireFlash
While the story is well-written, it's kinda short and without more it seems... unfinished? More is what the people demands!
01-02-2006, 04:50 PM#9
johnfn
Nice. Someone actually uses proper grammar for once . This could go places, I await the next part.
01-03-2006, 02:44 PM#10
Doublehex
I would have finished it by now, but Final Fantasy VIII is kinda stealing my time. I'll get to finish this eventually, no doubt about it.
01-06-2006, 09:00 PM#11
Bladefist
Continue.