| 01-07-2006, 04:09 AM | #1 |
I cant sleep. Really I cant. Im awake in my room all the lights off, laptop open and running, MSN is on, no one talking. Browser open sulking sites. Staring into the darkness behind my screen. What if somethings there? What if theres a giant bug? I read something like that, the government contacted aliens and theres TONS of species and one of the evil ones looks like insects! Cloaking divice and just watching my type away on my computer about him. Should I call him a him? Maybe a it...what if its a she? What if their social barriers arnt barriers rather there are none? What if I never sleep? Well I know I will. Of course I will. Maybe Ill wake up later tomorow. No I need to wake up early, should I sleep now? Now Im typing I should finish up...but what is there to finish up? Itll only finish when I decide to sleep...which certainly isnt now. Why is that emotion dancing? Its just some smiley face with arms and legs sticking out of it dancing! Hm.... What ever happened to me sleeping? And why am I just typing everything that comes to mind? I hear buzzing, sounds like a mosquito near my ear, I know there isnt its just my head. But still reminds me of the toture in the dark with a mosquito buzzing by your ear. You thrash around thinking youve killed it...only to hear the buzzing. Then you hide under the covers...buzing stops....your heating up all sweaty during the summer...buzzing starts. Mosquito IN the covers with you, West Nile can kill you. Really sleepy, why did I type that? What if I get flammed for typing this? What if this isnt a story? What if it gets closed, its happened before. But not like this, oh well. Why does my computer click? Is it trying to talk with me? I would sleep but what if theres a super intelligent insectoid and it is going to kill me? No it wouldnt. But what if I see it? I wouldnt its super intelligent. What if I turn on a light then go to my bed? I dont know why but light always makes me feel better...we humans certainly arnt nocturnal. I bet all the emo kids out there who say "darkness is my home" and shit must get scarred and turn on a light. Its not like they are like cats and can see...or buy night vision goggles. Its scary seeing into the abyss like this. You know where everything is...but what if theres something new? Ill turn on the light and close my computer...or stumble in the darkness. I choose light. Goodnight. |
| 01-07-2006, 09:27 AM | #2 |
(Goodnight) I once wrote a intresting piece about Insomnia. To bad its in dutch, or i'd post it in here. |
| 01-07-2006, 09:51 AM | #3 | |
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You forgot many ","'s try to remember to place "," Vigo Im dutch. so post it for me :) |
| 01-07-2006, 01:07 PM | #4 | |
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KingGigli, maybe it's not a story, but it's quite a nice character sketch, and it's probably the best thing you've ever wrote (maybe just because the grammar's so good but I also like how you did a lot of things, like make him paraniod, make him believiable and so on - (maybe you did these things without knowing it but hey, it works)). The weird insect thing was the only thing that really stood out, I was expecting it to finish off with "the insect decided to sleep for the night, it's job done" or something but he doesn't come back to it, so it just comes off kind of paranoid - almost not believeable. Other than that though, excellent job. |
| 01-07-2006, 05:21 PM | #5 |
I wanted it to come off as paranoid. Have you ever been sitting in your room, then remembering something you read or saw and then suddenly you have a 50% thought that everything you saw even though its not true...maybe it is? Anyways thankyou for the reply's, I possibly will do more work like this if the mood strikes. I also added it to my portfolio so check when i update it for the description of it. |
| 01-08-2006, 03:42 AM | #6 |
very interesting. I like this story, just because of how it shows how the mind wanders. Especially when you are tired. You forget what you were just doing, and then begin to do something else. Thoughts become disoriented and you end up wondering, why did i think that? Anyways, great short story. |
