|Nexolude|: Explusion [All Parts]

01-26-2006, 02:50 AM

This is a fiction series set in the universe of my upcoming campaign...
The |Nexolude| (check my info for link). This will feature 4-5 parts, and each will be entered into the writing contest thread as they are written (http://www.wc3campaigns.com/showthre...056#post762056) but will concidered a single enry (and resubmitted in a final post all together). Hope you enjoy, here is the first part.

Expulsion
Part I

"Father, I had another nightmare." says a young boy as he tugs upon the sheets of the bed of an elder man.
"Tell me boy, what did you see?" said the man as he rose slightly from the bed.
"Father what is wrong, you sound... More afraid than me."
"Hurry now, tell me what you saw."
"Yes, sorry father. It is hard to explain but... I saw at first only black, then I saw a figure step through the black... Glowing white, piercing my eyes with bright, it felt real. More real than now. Yet even though the figure was so bright, it seemed to give off no light to the area around it and myself. It moved towards me and struck its hand through my chest, then the dream became a mirror of itself. The colors flipped and the figure began to become visible but then I awoke, during this short time I felt a feeling undescribable. It seemed to hurt and soothed all at once." the boy nearly collapses onto his "father", hugging him in fear as he began to cry.
"I'm sorry father, I don't know why its so scary to think about. While I was dreaming it felt strange, but thinking back now it feels..." the boy looks in worry at his "father" now, and leans back slightly.
"..."
"Father?!" the boy cried as he looked at his "father" and saw light erupting from his chest and black flowing out and across the entirety of the room in a fabric-esque manner.
The world turned into the boys dream but he remained silent. The dream continued just as described, up until the figure struck its fist into the boy. Twisting it forced its way deep inside the boy, lifting him off the ground the figrure spoke in a deep yet far-away voice
"Squeal boy."
"..."
"Your father squealed, he struggled and cried up until the moment he fell before me."
"I am not my father." the boy turned into a glowing green as he spread out into an organic shape he again began to find a humanoid form. When the transformation was over he appeared to have matured from childhood into adulthood, and he glew with a faint green.
"You... You are not like the others..."
"Yes, the others were your pray. And I am your downfall." the boy, now an adult exploded in energy... Blowing the opposing figure into nothingness, and bringing the room back into sight.
"It matters not what you were, nor what I was... It only matters that I have destroyed you, and that in history me and my master shall be the same. We shall both be known as Nexolde, we shall live far on in both my history and all those ahead of me."
[Sorry I wrote this fast, hope you like it... Anyway.

The idea behind my entry/entries is that it goes throughout the history of Nexolde (up until not long ago, and how it became known as the Nexolude), their will be 3 or 4 more. And more time will be put into them, I simply wanted to have something out their incase I missed the deadline if I wrote it all at once so I threw this up fast.]
[From http://www.wc3campaigns.com/showthre...056#post762056]

01-27-2006, 11:00 AM	#2
Belphegor666	Intrignuing story though the dialogs and the general feel is rather slow... Maybe you should add more action etc. Well its fairly good anyway. I really think when you develop the story a little bit more the result would be great...

01-27-2006, 06:57 PM	#3
BloodStorm2262	Glad to hear interest, I'll be adding part two by tonight (hopefully).

01-28-2006, 05:26 AM	#4
Undead_Lives	Kinda weird...but cool altho I disagree on the action part...I would rather have you drag out the action. Instead of just saying "theguy shot him and theotherguy died" say, "theguy shot him with fiery bolt that shone like the sun, theotherguy turned around to fire his own..." etc.

01-28-2006, 03:37 PM

BloodStorm2262

Expulsion
Part 2

"I Nexolde keep no record of time, but I know my time is slowly approaching. I have been searching the lands around me, and found that there is one with the divine heritage. No doubt his people will not just give him too me, and so I am prepared for any circumstance... My master had taught me everything he knew, and I plan on doing the same for my student." says a rugged looking man speaking to himself, around the age of 60, while he sharpens a long kris.

"Alright, enough time wasted. I must head out now while the night is still upon us." Nexolde stands up from an angled log he was sitting on and drops the rock he was sharpening his kris with, he pulls his hood over his head and begins running towards a faint light at the end of the forest he was in.

After a few minutes of running, Nexolde became obviously tired... He continued on until reaching the edge of the forest, but after which he took a quick rest on a rock.

"Hail traveler, are you alright?" says a single patrolling orcish gaurd, he walks towards Nexolde with a torch and a sword.
"I"m only in need of rest and a hard ale, where may I find an Inn?"
"I know what you mean... I can lead you to the Inn in town, come on." the gaurd replies laughing.

As the gaurd turns his back Nexolde reveals his dagger from under his robe, he points the tip of the blade towards the crack in armor between the gaurd's shoulder and his side. Nexolde steps closer behind the gaurd and pulls back his arm preparing to thrust his kris into the side of the gaurd, but as he pushed forward the gaurd turned around as if preparing to say something.

"What the?! You damned rogue!"
"Hush now Orc, do you want your whole town destroyed?"
"... You... you're trained in magics?"
"You will find out, if you alert your town of my presence... I am not here to waste my time, but I will remove everything in my way."
"I can't risk my people, you may pass... I shall forget of your arrival."

Nexolde drew his kris and lunged at the gaurd before the feeble-minded Orc could respond.
"And I can't risk myself."

He then approached the wall around the village, staying a safe distance away from the gate he stabbed his kris into the wooden wall and pull himself up onto it. After pulling his dagger out of the wall, he leaped from the wall to the nearest roof. he knew the town by heart and knew where he was... It was only a matter of time before he arrived at the house he needed to get too. Once there he slid off the roof , and landed on the floor aside the building.

Remaining perfectly silent Nexolde slowly stepped through an open slit in the building, then he went to the room holding the child he needed. He took the baby orc into his arms gently, keeping it asleep... And then proceeded to wrap it in cloth and place it in a large pouch hidden inside his cloak. After he had the child he rushed to the fireplace, no longer worrying of waking the child or the parents he pulled a small bag out of his cloak and pulled a strange dust out of it. Nexolde sprinkled the dust around the fireplace and on the wooden furniture near it, then he threw the bag at the fire... By now the parents had woken up and were coming to him, and the baby was crying, but he didn't care about that anymore.

As soon as the bag hit the flames a huge eruption engulfed the entire house, and from the burning rubble stepped out Nexolde and slipped away into the crowd of people gathering around the house before anyone had a chance to ask any questions.

Over the next 17 years, Nexolde raised the Orc... Not as a father, but as a teacher.

02-04-2006, 04:30 AM	#6
Undead_Lives	Hm, good stuff...just some pointers... It's not gaurd. It's guard. And I would really like to know why he chose that orc...guess you'll have to write more :D Anyways, good continuation, and the detail was much better

02-06-2006, 07:13 PM	#7
BloodStorm2262	Was waiting for response before continuing, no point in finishing if it has none reading it , I'll try and get part 3 out soon. He chose an Orc for a reason that is yet to be revealed. Index: Part 1- "Begginings" Part 2- "Defense" Part 3- "Offense" Part 4- "Interlude" Part 5- "Expulsion" Giver Reps if you like (add reps for each Part you like and mention it in title please).

02-08-2006, 09:07 PM	#8
Undead_Lives	I don't think it's right to ask for rep.....so I won't give you any. Was thinking about it before you asked...