story of the newbie cinematic

well i got a story for a cinematic im making, and it goes like this:

There was a man who always have a nightmare about being chased by a dark man. In the beginning he was chased trough a grass field, then he wake up.
At that time he was still a kid, playing around in his garden, go to school every day. He have been living with his mother during his childhood, he never know who his father was, he was told by his mother that his father was on a long long journey and will return some day.

Then one morning, he woke up from this nightmare he usually has. It was early in the morning, the air is still fresh. His house lies in a forest, a small house with a tree behind, when the sun rises the shadow of the tree shade the roof of the house.
He pack his stuff and left the house with direction to his school. It was very quiet, too quiet in the forest, but that didn't wake his attention.
When he arrived to the area where his school usually is, he was like frozen, in front of him was a view that every child shouldn't see. It was blood, blood every where, and the smell of burned corpses.
He drop his bag and ran toward the school which no longer is a school, it will more likely turn into a graveyard. He found his friends lying on the ground lifeless, some of them even miss some pieces of their body. While he was walking around searching, he didn't even know what he was searching for, he was just searching. In that momment he heard a voice, a very low voice, almost lifeless voice. It was his teacher, he came closer. With a voice almost like a soft wind, the teacher said "your mother...".
The boy rappidly ran off the school and back to his house. When he saw his house, he stopped, looked at it for a momment, and walk hopelessly toward it.
At his house he found his mother killed.

... Well this story is quite long lets shorten it.

After that the boy buried his school and mother on a hill. He didn't know what to do, he just cried. Then there was a man came from behind and told the boy to come with him. The boy went away with the man.

Then time goes, the boy grows up...

To be continued

Mad, seriously, I love the story, its so good for a cinematic. I seriously hope you'll finish this

Upload some screenshots!

The story reminds me of fable a little bit..
I like the way the story is going, and it feels very suspensful.


btw, whats the name of the cinematic?

Great story, so do you need any assistance with this (I'm not offering help)? Cause this more belongs to the story forum :?

Still a nice story. Perfect for cinematics... as mentioned. Rep Given.

Ok the entire concept of my story is like this:

A very special boy with divine power lost his mother and all he knows.
He never know who his father is, his father is a divine being or something, not sure about this yet.
When his mother and school was killed - by those who want his divine power - a man came to him, this man is actually created from the boy himself.
Since all those close to him died, his inner anger and hate unleashes his dinvine power which created this man, who is nothing but only a part of the boy.
During the years while the boy grow up, he discover that he has a special force inside, at this time he also fell in love with a girl, and this girl brough happiness to him. He was happy, his anger and hate slowly fade away.
As time flow, he gain more control over his power.
This is when the man - who is a part of him - come to him and say that it is time to leave the boy, then trough conversations this the boy know who he and the man is.
Time flows again, this young man live in peace with this girl he love... but then one day the same bad guys who killed his mother came and want to capture him, he fought them, but during the fight, the girl he love was killed. Now his anger once again releases, but under his control, he turn into some king of divine being, the most powerful in history, he then kill the bad guys and their boss who also is a divine being... at the end he get to know that this boss also is his elder brother...
His brother killed his father and consumed his father's divine power, to grow stronger.
After this he went away, never return to the world again, a world of pain

... But of course i can turn this into a more normal story with no power or energy, just about an unlucky boy who lost everyone he knows, he then later grow up and become a great person

I agree, though this could come out to be a good cinematic. I wish you good luck on your work.

If I'm not wrong, he just spoiled the entire story for us -___-"