Writer's Block, a poem.

I wrote this when I broke FREE of writer's block obviously. A movie (called Proof) gave me a sense of inspiration, so that's how I broke free :P
Anyways, here is the poem.

Writer's block is like a disease,
It's often there, but never to please.
It's like walking down a street full of men,
Beggars, druggies, a hundred and ten.
And they'll ask you for some money,
A few cents, maybe some honey.
One penny, two pennies, maybe even three?
That's the game they play you see.
While you continue you hit a wall.
A brick one, ten feet tall.
And you're trying to get to the place you've won,
Then you notice the buildings block out the sun.
Suddenly the wall is gone, as if it was a daze.
And you think, was I in a phase?
But you find yourself in the open air,
The city is no more, and you haven't a care.
Finally your imagination runs free,
And you sit there writing, full of glee.

Comments and criticizm (is it an s instead of a z?) are welcome.

On the message:
Nice ending. Dreaming away and then the inpiration is back. I had that once myself. I was having trouble with a dialoge then i actually fell asleep. I woke up and i understood what i should do.1

I fail to see why a writers block is like walking past beggars...
Then again, ive never had a actual writers block. I think its like trying to pick up a bubble, you are strong enough to lift it and hold its weight but when you touch it, it falls apart.

On the poem itself
You try to ryhme to much. some things just dont make sense and only rhyme.
This makes me wonder if you are english. This part has a good flow but it states the obvious.
Another exsample:
dosnt make any sense. why honey? do beggars eat honey?

Overal i would give it a 5 out of 10, because i liked the end.

Ya sometimes I sacrifice sense for rhyming... :P
And I speak English perfectly, it's my first language.
Oh, and on the beggars note, it was just to give the feel of walking down an alley, the beggars really have nothing to do with writer's block.
And I like the first two lines, even though it states the obvious.

It's alright. I don't think you should try to force a rhyme, because you come out looking Dr. Suess-esque in some points (eg "full of glee", "never to please") and kind of choppy. I think you could have done better with just a free form rhyme. The link between walking down a street and writing wasn't too clear in my mind. I don't really understand how giving money to beggars has anything to do with writing.

All in all, it was okay. Considering it's a poem it could do well with more descriptive detail, metaphors, similies and related fun. Keep writing :D

I'm a rhyming freak what can I say :P
I should post more of my poems here..

Yes you should. I like poems. Reading that is, i hate writing them though. everything it write is either already done before of really REALLY sick minded... :P well in my case.

But keep those poems comming.

I'll look up a bunch of them and post them all in one thread...one of these days :P
Probably soon though.

Soon as in 7 minutes after you posted this? ^^

Forgot to edit that post :P