brain rumathism and stuff

So, here are a few pages from the comic I'm working on. Don't expect to understand anything, since it's starting at page 4, it lacks the text on most pages, and anyway the text is in french. Also, it lacks a few pages (pages 6, 7, 10, 11, 12, currently in progress)

The comic will be arround 22 pages long. Those are pen drawings based on a pencil sketch, and then touched up in PS7.


The full comic shall be released within one month.

I still think you need to imporve your faces. But the rest is great.

pretty impressive!

but i couldnt help but notice there is a sighn in the 4th page that sais "bate"

...i giggled.

nice lines, but lack life and emotion in the characters

where did they get the shovels?

They found them in page 12. Which isn't here.

lol dont you play games? in games they got inventory, and there they can store everything invisible, and can just pop out anything instantly at any time :P

I quite like, care for a translated version after yer done the french one?

wow. lots a of detail. must have been a real "dog" to draw.

Yep I'll translate it to english and post it here ^^

Remember, there is such a thing as too much detail. Keep your focus points detailed, keep the rest simple. Right now, the images dont lead your eye around the page and make it more difficult to read, definatly a big point in comics more then other things. Work on your line quality, both in your shading and your contours. Needs more definitive light sources and less dodge/burn lookin stuff. Overall, youve improved alot, good job.