The Rise of the Orks

A major edit to what I posted before, now its an actual "story", not a list of events with fancy Bold titles. It also speaks more about WC3 stuffs. Anyways, its more of an Intro to a secret thing that I'm starting on. Enjoy:

In a ditch effort to escape an Interment camp, a group of Orcish slaves clawed underneath their Iron cells with the help of the soft ground. They walk down a long corrider lined with imprisoned bandits and theives, and steal a pair of keys to a locked door from a sleeping guard. They exit quietly and walk swiftly and carefully not to alert anyone of their escape. Hall by hall, corridor by corridor, the Orcs ran through the Internment Camp. They eventually reached the large main gate that was guarded by four guards who paced around the gates patiently, incase someone tries to escape. The Orcs act quickly. Two Orcs sneak up on the guards and steal their weapon, with the others wrestling them to the ground. The now armed Orcs killed the guards and escaped, but were followed immediately afterwards by mounted footmen. (Meaning Footmen (WC3 Unit) riding horses.)

Day after day the Orcs ran, through lush forests, to large open plains, to outskirts of small human villages. They eventually reached Menethil Harbor. They swam through the water and snuck onto one of the boats as they sailed towards Darkshore on the continent of Kalimdor. There they revealed their presence. They mounted Nightsabers and rode as fast as they could through the Plaguelands and Ashenvale. They evaded creatures and Night Elves alike, and without rest they traveled. Upon reaching the Barrens they sighed with great relief. The Night Elves stopped following them and the creatures of the Plaguelands and Ashenvale returned to their respective forests. The Orcs rode to Durotar and were smiled upon by their Horde allies. When they reached Durotar, they were greeted by their fellow Orcs. The escapees made their way to the Valley of Trials, where the Trolls and Orcs learnt to fight and survive the harsh enviornments in which they lived. There is where this story ends and where yours begins... as one of the escapees, it is up to you to decide your fate in the harsh enviornments of the world of Azeroth...

Well, there you have it, Intro to a secret that you (hopefully) shan't tell no one. (That is if you know what it is =D) Well, I hope you liked it. Comment please.

Eh this isnt what I would call a story, more of a series of events. This happened, this guy said this, he had an accent, they did this, they killed these people, the end. Im not sure if this entire story is just an introduction or what, but you really should put much more detail into your posts or you wont become a better writer. There's plenty going on to expand upon on, but you're not expanding. For example, the orcs just accepted him as thier leader and go kill humans.

Spend time thinking of what you are going to write, pretend you are in thier shoes, and then write. If you dont like it, then re-write it. I really dont have much more to say other than I think you can do much better, put some more time into it.

I'd like to call it a "summary", but I understand what you mean. I didnt put that much time on it, infact I think I may as well trash it and start again. I have the ability to make nice stories, but I need to think long and hard, didnt do so here I suppose. I'll rewrite it and make it nice soon enough.

Edit: Rewritten entirely. New story that has to do with normal Orcs and more with WC3 Lore. I like it alot, and it really matches the model I'm using (that I ripped from Orc Glads [With antiprotection tools, will not post either of the three]) which is the Orc from the Campaign screen in RoC. He looks like he was imprisoned, so I'm usin' him. Anyways, It sounds a little like an intro to a new character in WoW, which I like =D. Voice acting on this would be cool, but it's just a storyline so far.

Some grammar & spelling mistakes.


Dont use numbers in writing, it looks unproffesional. It should be "The" insead of they, and mounted footmen is a paradox. The name footmen implies that they are not mounted :P


As for the actual story. It's not bad, it could be better, I felt the journey was lacking a bit but I realize you didnt want to go into detail about it. However, it is a great improvement on what you had before.

Thanks for the nice critisism. I had a mistake going on while I was writing, so I did expect some typos. As for the paradox... the "footmen" refers to the human unit in WC3, the "mounted" refers to him riding a horse. Thats all. As for the improvement, I realised it wasn't as good as I wanted it to be. As for the story itself, well, It's a short summary. As you could tell I didnt explain as to what exactly happened when they reached Darkshore until reaching Durotar. It's only because I want it to be short, I may (or may not) put this in the loading screen , not sure, but I'm still working on it. Woopsie, revealed to much...

But, a question, out of curiosity, did you figure out what this project will be? Hint: Its an intro to a project, incase you didnt know and I didnt say that.

Edit: Ok, she's all proofread and ready to go. I already started on the high res doodad collection (not exactly sure who made em', but their nice) which includes barrens doodads and Orgrimmar walls. The only flaw is, I dont know how to make the roofs go ontop of the walls... any help would be nice.